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The sky was a pale, milky grey above the bare and bleak trees, as they clung to their very last autumn leaves that fluttered in the icy wind.

Amongst those trees was the house.

Tall and empty, it's shattered windows looked out onto the world like a pair of dull eyes. Susan stood alone. As she looked up at the house from the end of the muddy gravel path that rolled out before her, a shiver flew through her body.

She wanted him to be inside there, needed him almost. The cold of the dawn and the crushing loneliness were slowly getting too much for her. Yet Susan was afraid. As much as she wanted to run inside the house, as much as she wanted to find him, the thought of his dark and hollow eyes made her heart stutter with anxiety. It started to rain.

Her weathered brown boots scraped at the floor indecisively as Susan contemplated her current situation. She looked down at the crumpled piece of paper in her hand, and at the address written on it in smudgy black ink. The paper wilted in her palm and she watched as black tears poured down the paper's face whilst it drowned in thick raindrops.

He said that this was where he lived. But the house before her hadn't been lived in for years. The rain picked up.  
Just me experimenting with ommitted information in a little short story. It is meant to be all mysterious and cliffhangery, if that's even a word. I'm not sure if I'll continue with this and make it longer. Anyway, comment if you like, or if you're confused and feel free to suggest on how to improve.
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mistress-macabre Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Your description of things is elegant and beautiful. It's like honey and milk spiced with cinnamon.
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MissEllaAllanPoe Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! Speaking of elegant and beautiful, that was a lovely comment you gave there! I'm thinking of posting more stuff on dA soon, as I've found a lot of scraps of stories that I've written and I've begun to improve upon, so...
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mistress-macabre Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Will def. keep my eye out x
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MissEllaAllanPoe Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks xx
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MissEllaAllanPoe Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Sorry, I accidentally clicked on the sad emoticon whilst I went for the add comment button... I'm fine, really.
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After--Forever Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, you're welcome lol :XD: it happens~
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MissEllaAllanPoe Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I know right!
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MissEllaAllanPoe Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I know right, shit does happen.
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MissEllaAllanPoe Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh thanks!
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After--Forever Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like it :)
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